add feedback from meredith

index.html

@@ -24,7 +24,6 @@
       .main {
         max-width: 600px;
         padding: 2em;
-        text-align: justify;
         margin: auto;
         padding-top: 1em;
       }
@@ -50,11 +49,11 @@
       .broken-up {
         display: flex;
         width: 100%;
-        justify-content: space-between;
         padding: 0;
       }
       .broken-up li {
         list-style: none;
+        padding-right: 1.5em;
       }
       .definition {
         border-left: 3px solid lightgrey;
@@ -81,6 +80,9 @@
       .definition .addendum {
         font-size: 16px;
       }
+      .definition .description {
+        text-align: justify;
+      }
       @media(max-width: 700px) {
         .broken-up {
           display: block;
@@ -107,8 +109,8 @@
         <li><a href="https://blog.veitheller.de">Blog</a></li>
       </ul>
       <p>
-        Nice to meet you! I’m Veit, a programmer from Berlin, and I’m a
-        technologist at large.
+        Nice to meet you! I’m Veit, a programmer from Berlin and a technologist
+        at large.
       </p>
       <div class="definition">
         <p class="summary">
@@ -141,22 +143,24 @@
         <summary>What I can do for you</summary>
         <p>
           I am available for consulting work. Here are a few examples of
-          things that I could do for you:
+          work I could do for you:
         </p>
         <ul>
           <li>
             Help you figure out what technologies are well-suited for your
-            project, and a roadmap that makes sense for you.
+            project, and create an actionable roadmap.
           </li>
           <li>
-            Design and architect services, and help your team build it.
+            Design and architect software services, and help your team build
+            them.
           </li>
           <li>
-            Prototype a new idea, documenting the process and assumptions along
-            the way meticulously so you can take over without pain.
+            Prototype a new idea or extension of your business, and meticulously
+            document the process and assumptions along the way so you can take
+            over painlessly.
           </li>
           <li>
-            Mentor developers and lead by example, through honest and kind
+            Mentor developers and lead by example through honest and kind
             review and code to build on top of.
           </li>
         </ul>
@@ -170,8 +174,8 @@
           My ultimate goal is always to make myself replacable. I want you to be
           able to take over control whenever you think the right time has
           come—ideally we find a moment together—, and I want you to be able to
-          continue work exactly where I stopped. I don’t want you to need to
-          depend on me, and neither do you.
+          pick up work exactly where I stopped. I don’t want you to become
+          dependent on me, and neither do you.
         </p>
         <p>
           You can also take a look at my <a href="/static/resume.pdf">résumé</a>
@@ -182,8 +186,7 @@
       <details>
         <summary>What I charge</summary>
         <p>
-          My rates are fixed and follow a simple, yet beautiful—at least in my
-          eyes—scheme:
+          My rates are fixed and follow a simple, but beautiful scheme:
         </p>
         <ul>
           <li>
@@ -192,7 +195,9 @@
           </li>
           <li>
             If your product is open source, I charge 800€ per day, 100€ of which
-            will be donated to a charitable organization of my choice.
+            will be donated to a charitable organization of my choice. If you want
+            to know which organizations I support and why, check out
+            <a href="">my blog post about it</a>!
           </li>
         </ul>
         <p>
@@ -205,18 +210,17 @@
         <summary>How you can contact me</summary>
         <p>
           I love to hear from any- and everyone who wants to share something
-          with me, and doubly so if I can help you in any way!
+          with me, especially if I can help you in any way!
         </p>
         <p>
           If you have any questions, comments, or want me to help your product
-          succeed <a href="mailto:veit@veitheller.de">reach out to me</a>! My
+          succeed <a href="mailto:veit@veitheller.de">reach out to me</a>. My
           PGP key is available <a href="/static/key/pubkey.asc">on this
           server</a>.
         </p>
         <p>
-          Of course you can also contact me if you just want to have a chat! To
-          understand what I can help you with and what I especially like hearing
-          about, check out
+          Of course, you can also contact me just to chat! To understand what I
+          can help you with and what I’m particularly interested in, check out
           <a href="https://blog.veitheller.de/open_invite.html">my open
           invitation</a>!
         </p>